Wednesday, 28 September 2016

Summary of article LTA - Draft 2

In the article “TRAINS ON THE NORTH-SOUTH AND EAST-WEST LINES SAFE FOR SERVICE”, the Land Transport Authority (LTA, 2016) wrote that despite undergoing rectification works, the trains that have been in the media spotlight are safe for service.
According to LTA, all new trains are tested before they are put into service. For defective trains, immediate action was taken to prevent defects from resurfacing during train operation.
Hairline cracks that were discovered during inspection were confirmed to not affect operational safety. Nevertheless, to ensure that there are sufficient trains for commuters, all affected trains were sent back, one at a time, for rectification. Stringent checks would also be performed regularly to ensure operational safety of all trains. This article was written to clarify that safety was never compromised despite having defects on the trains, and extensive measures were taken to rectify the problem.

In my opinion, the issue was handled systematically by the respective parties, as it might have been a bigger issue.
The Straits Times webpage wrote that, "Mr Khaw said the trains can take more the three times the maximum stress they may experience during operations, an d the cracks have not reduced this safety margin. An independent accessor, TUV Rheinland, confirmed that the trains are entirely safe to operate." According to another Straits Times article, SIM University senior lecturer Park Byung Joon said cracks on metal are not uncommon. "Many people don't realise airplanes are flying full of cracks," he said. "As long as those are properly monitored, they do not pose a safety concern." After reading the two Straits Times article, commuters should know that stress tests are being conducted on the trains to ensure that they are safe for operation.
Additionally, Channel News Asia stated that, “Hairline cracks were found on bolsters which support the train car body of 26 trains, and so manufacturer Kawaksaki-Sifang arranged for all bolsters and car bodies to be replaced. It also extended the warranty period for these parts.” I felt that they handled the issue professionally; In addition, instead of pushing the blame, they took action by taking responsibility and rectified the problem.

In The Straits Times article, one of the key issues raised was Why was the issue not made public earlier?”. Response was that there were no safety issues and the issue was accounted for by the manufacturers; Moreover, commuters would not suffer a lack of train due to the incident, and if the problem was not dealt with pleasingly, only then would the situation be publicized. In this article, many questions were answered by Mr Khaw himself and his intention was clear that he did not want to create public unrest due to this issue.
In conclusion, they have done well rectifying the problem systematically, as well as, answering to the public regarding their concerns.


Cracks on MRT trains: Khaw addresses key issues raised (2016, Aug 17). In Straits times. Retrieved from

Hairline cracks found on 11 Sengkang-Punggol LRT trains (2016, Sept 10). In Straits times, Retrieved from

Khaw: Lessons to be learnt from defective SMRT trains incident (2016, Aug 16). In Channel News Asia. Retrieved from


Minister Khaw Boon Wan: I covered up the news of MRT train return (2016, July 12). In Straits times review page. Retrieved from

Revised on: 9/10/16 


  1. Thanks, Chris, for your patience in waiting for my feedback.

    This is a decent effort in terms of your accurate summary and the language use throughout. What needs attention is the way you articulate your thesis and then the manner by which your body paragraphs support that thesis. I don't see topic sentences that link the thesis to the major areas of support. I do see lots of direct quotes, which could be paraphrased, but none of these are not introduced or cited properly.

    Here are the more specific details:

    1) ...that there are sufficient trains for commuters... >>> (verb tense inconsistency)

    2) In my opinion, the issue was handled systematically by the respective parties, as it might have been a bigger issue. >>> This is your thesis, right? The controlling idea is a bit vague: " might have been a bigger issue." Meaning? Specifically?

    3) What are the topic sentences of the supporting body paragraphs that directly link to your thesis?

    4) (incorrect citation convention)
    --- The Straits Times webpage wrote... >>>
    --- According to another Straits Times article...
    --- ...Channel News Asia stated that....
    --- In The Straits Times article...

    5) the two Straits Times article >>> ?

    6) I felt that they handled .... >>> Who is "they"?

    7) ... they have done well rectifying .... >>> ?

    8) incorrect APA-based reference list

    Let's work on this.

  2. Thank you for your kind feedback. I will work on those areas.